i'll admit that i'm not too crazy about this one, either. i think the pink looks too bright and harsh on you - maybe try using a lighter pink and tone it down a bit? and i also agree with buttercup - the pink on the lower lash line w/o any black e/l gives the appearance of irritated eyes so i would omit that and just add the black e/l - and some black mascara on the top lashes, too.
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